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Dark shadows dance upon the gray walls like a delicate ballerina in a mirror.
Matching shapes and lines with scars and freckles, I watch the shadows falter,
Fade, trickling down those gray walls, losing their grip upon reality slowly.
Where is that beautiful, delicate ballerina dancing in the mirror?

(She died, long ago with my innocence
Gone, stolen by scissors and lies).
:iconashengrayskies-lit:

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poem written by me
this is kind of a personal poem to me...I might go back and add more later but right now I can't add anymore, so many memories that are just better left tucked away, every time i tried to add one it came out wrong

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:iconkekilen:
i like the length of this and think it works out well, but then i am not a fan of longer poems =p

It is obvious why so many writers write about coming of age and loss of innocence because it the biggest change that all of us go through, this is where your world view changes from an imaginary world to seeing the reality of a brutal world that has been hidden from you. This is a great use of words which is what I expect from you but it also does a great job in describing what many people go through with not using many words, I know I can relate even though I was never a ballerina =p
:iconashengrayskies-lit:
neither was i =p hahahaha thanks for the attempted critique on my writing with your non writey skills =p hehehe :)

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alyssa-anne
:iconkekilen:
you think thats funny dont you, but if i didnt comment you would whine and say go read my new poem and tell me what you think =p

and this was the best comment you got for this poem =D
:iconashengrayskies-lit:
hahahaha it was the only one i got?? lol
it was nice thank you :)

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alyssa-anne
:iconkekilen:
thats what makes it the best =p

so i should attempt to comment on your writing in the future ?
:iconashengrayskies-lit:
hahha if you want i won't complain if you don't XD

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alyssa-anne
:iconashengrayskies-lit:
thank you!!

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alyssa-anne
:icondreamsinstatic:
Wonderful work, I really enjoyed the dark tone to this piece. The lines are fantastically written, darkly beautiful.

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